Reader: Pet Peeve – specific description


I will not remember – he stood 6’4” in socks while his brown wavy hair blew in the wind making his green eyes shine bright.

Nope, not going to remember. I’ll forget by the next page how tall he was and ain’t going to care.

All I’m getting from that line is he’s in his socks and it’s windy. Reading relates to the visual part of our imagination…or at least it does in mine, and from others’ inputs, them too. We don’t see in specifics. So, show me his height.

Hair and eye colour? What’s so important about those?

They only matter if another character is reacting to them or notes something about them – which then gives me information on the emotions and feel of the scene. That I want. That moves the story forward.